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Geschrieben von eva13 am 15.03.2011 um 11:15:

  übe auch einen Aufsatz bitte um Verbesserung

Ich soll einen Aufsatz über eine Geisterunterrichtsstunde schreiben:

One day the teacher passed easily through the wall into the classroom

A young ghost was screaming, "Aaarrgh!". Another ghost was sleebing, while his friend was painting his head blue. Mandy was doing her homework about Britain´s castles angrily, because it was really difficult. Suddenly the teacher shouted, "Don´t speak! Now we are going to learn to take your heads off." He took his head carefully off and the ghosts dit it, too. Unfortunately they did´t find their heads.

After two hours everyone had his head back and the lesson finished.

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Geschrieben von Klaus-Bärbel am 11.05.2011 um 14:59:

 

Hi,

es heißt eigentlich sleeping und bei 'they did it too' würd ich lieber schreiben 'they did that too'. Und am Ende würde ich schreiben 'unfortunately they couldn't find their heads again'.
Gab's ne vorgabe wie lang der Aufsatz ein sollte?

Klaus-Bärbel