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kriwanek
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Hallo
aslo ich wollte fragen ob ihr diesen text anschauen könnt also nach fehlern.
da sind sicher viel drin wegen der reported speech. und ween es zu viel wird ist es auch egal weil es sind 234 wörter. Ja ok^^
When I turned round I suddenly realized that I had lost my group.I didn’t know whta I should do now. I ws at the underground station and there was no way to find my group. I asked many people if thes had seen someone of my group. But I hadn’t luck. I went to teh police station and said thet I had lost my group. I had to describe all of them. Then I should wait, but this made me nervous an I ran away. I was very hungry and at least I had money with me an d so I bought me a hot dog. I sat on a bank and wait. Suddenly I saw my mother but she did not search me. I wanted to run to her but she did as she would not know me. She said that sh did not know what I wanted from her. I ran away an cry. An old woman noticed me. She said that I must go to the old house. But I did not know wht she mean. So I ran again away. Suddenly I saw an old house. I went in it. There was only a very big wardrobe. I went in it an suddenly I woke up and open my eyes. I realized that this was only a bad dream. An I was in New york on holiday with my family.
DANKE
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Nicky
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Liebe Kriwanek 
ich kann dir nicht versprechen, dass ich ehute dazu Zeit finden werde, weil ich selber sehr viel zu hause zu tun habe. Dennoch könntest du erstmal selber es dir nochmal anschauen um Tippfehlern usw... zu finden. Es sind mehere drin und ersprrt mir eine Menge Arbeit beim anschauen nachher, wenn du die wegmachst.
Liebe Grüße
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kriwanek
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Hallo Nicky
alsow enn du es heute nicht mehr schaffst musst du dir gar keine mühe mehr machen ich hätte es morgen grabrauch ist aber auch nicht so schlimm.
Trotzdem vielen dank.
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Sinje
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HI
geh einfach nochmal durch deinen Text  da sind zu viele tipp fehler drin
Liebe grüße,
Sinje
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kriwanek
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Hallo OK danke^^
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When I turned round I suddenly realized that I had lost my group.I didn’t know whta I should do now. I ws at the underground station and there was no way to find my group. I asked many people if thes had seen someone of my group. But I hadn’t luck. I went to teh police station and said thet I had lost my group. I had to describe all of them. Then I should wait, but this made me nervous an I ran away. I was very hungry and at least I had money with me an d so I bought me a hot dog. I sat on a bank and wait. Suddenly I saw my mother but she did not search me. I wanted to run to her but she did as she would not know me. She said that sh did not know what I wanted from her. I ran away an cry. An old woman noticed me. She said that I must go to the old house. But I did not know wht she mean. So I ran again away. Suddenly I saw an old house. I went in it. There was only a very big wardrobe. I went in it an suddenly I woke up and open my eyes. I realized that this was only a bad dream. An I was in New york on holiday with my family.
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When I turned round I suddenly realized that I had lost my group.I didn’t know what I should do now. I was at the underground station and there was no way to find my group. I asked many people if they had seen someone of my group. But I hadn’t luck. I went to the police station and said thet I had lost my group. I had to describe all of them. Then I should wait, but this made me nervous an I ran away. I was very hungry and at least I had money with me and so I bought me a hot dog. I sat on a bank and wait. Suddenly I saw my mother but she did not search me. I wanted to run to her but she did as she would not know me. She said that she did not know what I wanted from her. I ran away an cry. An old woman noticed me. She said that I must go to the old house. But I did not know wht she mean. So I ran again away. Suddenly I saw an old house. I went in it. There was only a very big wardrobe. I went in it an suddenly I woke up and open my eyes. I realized that this was only a bad dream. And I was in New york on holiday with my family.
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Hay, My name is Kevin and I'm 15 year old.
Bonjour, je m'appelle Kevin et j'ai 15 ans.
Hallo ich heiße Kevin und bin 15 Jahre alt.
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nighean_neonach
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Kevin, du brauchst nach 2 Wochen keine Verbesserung mehr zu machen.
Mona
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04.02.2007 13:32 |
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English-Boy
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Ich wollte ja nur helfen :'-(
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Hay, My name is Kevin and I'm 15 year old.
Bonjour, je m'appelle Kevin et j'ai 15 ans.
Hallo ich heiße Kevin und bin 15 Jahre alt.
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